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Pronnmo · 20 Jan 2002, 20:44

Here's a little something I wrote this morning..I don't really like it, but if I don't like it, why should you ppl go unspoiled?

Flowing

In the beginning
there was nothing,
nothing at all
nothing at all

From this nothing
sprang a dry river bed
milenia after milenia
nothing more
nothing at all

In an instant
the flood came
gushing forward
never stopping
or so it seemed
so it seemed

Then a wall
of massive proportions
stopped the flow
cut it short
like a flaming sword through thickest ice
melting
vapourising
everything that flowed

Now the river
yurns with desire
it wants to flow
it wants to go forward
in a neverending stride
gushing forward
forever
and ever
and ever

I ask this question
to my lonly self
will my river
ever flow again
gushing forward
in the name of love
endless time will tell
endless time will tell

:|^|:..and if rain brings winds of change, let it rain on us forever..:|^|:

AV_defender · 20 Jan 2002, 20:58

ey this one's great..a bit philosophy hiding there in the back!!!
i love songs/lyrics about creation and the beginning of everything.
way to go!!

/Defender-The Watcher Of The Scene

micki · 21 Jan 2002, 16:34

it was nice...a bit special, but good!! :)
...the beginning made me think of Howard Jones´ song "Hide and Seek"...

"the Child of the new Season"

Trent · 21 Jan 2002, 22:18

Very good work mate...I like the repeat lines..remind me of Poe...Nevermore...Nevermore!!

"When I close my eyes, I see my soul...When I open them, I see yours"...
Trent

Pronnmo · 01 Feb 2002, 18:28

Thanks!

I'm glad you didn't flame it totally..

/P

:|^|:..and if rain brings winds of change, let it rain on us forever..:|^|:

Trent · 01 Feb 2002, 21:48

Why would we flame it??? It's a nice poem...nothing there to flame mate

"When I close my eyes, I see my soul...When I open them, I see yours"...
Trent

Pronnmo · 01 Feb 2002, 21:52

I dunno, some ppl find somethign to flame in everything. I'm glad you ppl ain't like that! you're terriffic...damn I'm tired now..

The poem btw somewhat reflects my feelings as I have had the latest year, especially love.

:|^|:..and if rain brings winds of change, let it rain on us forever..:|^|:

Trent · 04 Feb 2002, 18:23

Well "Those people" need to be B.B. gunned in the butt...No sense in flaming poetry...even if it is worth flaming..it's an expression of art and true feelings...*Totally respects that*

"When I close my eyes, I see my soul...When I open them, I see yours"...
Trent

Ariana Dreamer · 05 Feb 2002, 10:50

Pronnmo, from the heart;
I really loved your poem!
Just wanted you to know that.

With all my love - I went into the world

Streetside Romeo · 15 Jul 2002, 23:23

Hey, looks promising! Really! Keep on writing, especially when you go through thunderstorms: It helps and the works get the better the more confused/happy/rageous/desperated/lucky (...) you are.

Forever Young!

20 Jan 2002, 20:44	#1
Pronnmo Dreamer Join Date: 27 Dec 2001 Location: Uppsala, Sweden Posts: 293	Existence Here's a little something I wrote this morning..I don't really like it, but if I don't like it, why should you ppl go unspoiled? Flowing In the beginning there was nothing, nothing at all nothing at all From this nothing sprang a dry river bed milenia after milenia nothing more nothing at all In an instant the flood came gushing forward never stopping or so it seemed so it seemed Then a wall of massive proportions stopped the flow cut it short like a flaming sword through thickest ice melting vapourising everything that flowed Now the river yurns with desire it wants to flow it wants to go forward in a neverending stride gushing forward forever and ever and ever I ask this question to my lonly self will my river ever flow again gushing forward in the name of love endless time will tell endless time will tell :\|^\|:..and if rain brings winds of change, let it rain on us forever..:\|^\|:

20 Jan 2002, 20:58	#2
AV_defender Exclusive Fanclub Member Join Date: 06 Dec 2000 Location: Arjeplog, , Sweden. Posts: 1,279	ey this one's great..a bit philosophy hiding there in the back!!! i love songs/lyrics about creation and the beginning of everything. way to go!! /Defender-The Watcher Of The Scene

21 Jan 2002, 16:34	#3
micki Banned Join Date: 30 Aug 2001 Location: Where the streets have no name, , . Posts: 2,950	it was nice...a bit special, but good!! :) ...the beginning made me think of Howard Jones´ song "Hide and Seek"... "the Child of the new Season"

21 Jan 2002, 22:18	#4
Trent Dreamer Join Date: 22 Dec 2000 Location: Raleigh, NC, USA. Posts: 2,357	Very good work mate...I like the repeat lines..remind me of Poe...Nevermore...Nevermore!! "When I close my eyes, I see my soul...When I open them, I see yours"... Trent

01 Feb 2002, 18:28	#5
Pronnmo Dreamer Join Date: 27 Dec 2001 Location: Uppsala, Sweden Posts: 293	Thanks! I'm glad you didn't flame it totally.. /P :\|^\|:..and if rain brings winds of change, let it rain on us forever..:\|^\|:

01 Feb 2002, 21:48	#6
Trent Dreamer Join Date: 22 Dec 2000 Location: Raleigh, NC, USA. Posts: 2,357	Why would we flame it??? It's a nice poem...nothing there to flame mate "When I close my eyes, I see my soul...When I open them, I see yours"... Trent

01 Feb 2002, 21:52	#7
Pronnmo Dreamer Join Date: 27 Dec 2001 Location: Uppsala, Sweden Posts: 293	I dunno, some ppl find somethign to flame in everything. I'm glad you ppl ain't like that! you're terriffic...damn I'm tired now.. The poem btw somewhat reflects my feelings as I have had the latest year, especially love. :\|^\|:..and if rain brings winds of change, let it rain on us forever..:\|^\|:

04 Feb 2002, 18:23	#8
Trent Dreamer Join Date: 22 Dec 2000 Location: Raleigh, NC, USA. Posts: 2,357	Well "Those people" need to be B.B. gunned in the butt...No sense in flaming poetry...even if it is worth flaming..it's an expression of art and true feelings...Totally respects that "When I close my eyes, I see my soul...When I open them, I see yours"... Trent

05 Feb 2002, 10:50	#9
Ariana Dreamer Dreamer Join Date: 02 Oct 2001 Location: Somewhere, Sweden Posts: 1,220	Pronnmo, from the heart; I really loved your poem! Just wanted you to know that. With all my love - I went into the world

15 Jul 2002, 23:23	#10
Streetside Romeo Strange Attractor Join Date: 18 Mar 2001 Location: Dötlingen, Germany Posts: 744	Hey, looks promising! Really! Keep on writing, especially when you go through thunderstorms: It helps and the works get the better the more confused/happy/rageous/desperated/lucky (...) you are. Forever Young!