Here it is then - my poetic efforts - Alphaville Forum

Kaz · 08 Feb 2003, 01:18

Ok, I'll let you read some. Only posting one for now. Others may follow soon.

[u]AT CLOSE OF WINTER </u>(1996)

To sleep, sweet love, and not to stir,
for night has touched your face so fair
and laid you down to rest ‘til dawn.
I shall not weep. I shall not mourn.
The sight of tumbling locks so red
adorning you upon the bed
as darkness sweeps you up in arms.
No ray of light to keep you warm.
Your porcelain skin, your sweeping brow;
no sun or star will grace them now.
No moonlight guides you on your way
as you receive the close of day.
Your cup, once full, is empty left;
your fragile vessel now bereft.
So sleep sweet love and do not stay,
for I must let your love astray.
Must give it wings and let it fly.
Must kiss your once sweet lips goodbye.

wii · 08 Feb 2003, 09:08

Very nice...

davidhorizon · 08 Feb 2003, 13:34

Beautiful! Is there a personal story behind this poem?

Clare · 08 Feb 2003, 13:51

I really like that. Very atmospheric.

russharvey · 08 Feb 2003, 14:03

great!! MORE! MORE!!!

Alien · 08 Feb 2003, 20:54

beautiful

Kaz · 09 Feb 2003, 22:18

Thanks all. I wrote it when I was in one of my dreamy phases - off this planet so to speak!

It's about a man sitting with his lover who has just died. It shows the feelings he goes through and his thoughts and how he realises that he must say goodbye once and for all time.

Trent · 10 Feb 2003, 05:31

I got gooseflesh the first time I read this...I could feel the sorrow and loss he felt..and also the realization that life must go on and it's time to say goodbye...Very powerful poem Karen!

Clare · 10 Feb 2003, 12:38

wish I could write like that.

Trent · 10 Feb 2003, 16:51

Me too Clare, Me too!!!

08 Feb 2003, 01:18	#1
Kaz Her... Join Date: 22 Jan 2003 Location: Bucharest, Romania Posts: 12,459	Here it is then - my poetic efforts Ok, I'll let you read some. Only posting one for now. Others may follow soon. [u]AT CLOSE OF WINTER </u>(1996) To sleep, sweet love, and not to stir, for night has touched your face so fair and laid you down to rest ‘til dawn. I shall not weep. I shall not mourn. The sight of tumbling locks so red adorning you upon the bed as darkness sweeps you up in arms. No ray of light to keep you warm. Your porcelain skin, your sweeping brow; no sun or star will grace them now. No moonlight guides you on your way as you receive the close of day. Your cup, once full, is empty left; your fragile vessel now bereft. So sleep sweet love and do not stay, for I must let your love astray. Must give it wings and let it fly. Must kiss your once sweet lips goodbye.

08 Feb 2003, 13:51	#4
Clare Alphanut Join Date: 31 Mar 2001 Location: By a river, near Fort William in view of Ben Nevis Posts: 9,969	I really like that. Very atmospheric. "I've had many sobering thoughts in my life.... ....it was them what drove me to drink!" [drunk] Grandad, Only Fools and Horses (UK sitcom)

08 Feb 2003, 14:03	#5
russharvey Dream Keeper Join Date: 13 Jan 2001 Location: Grants Pass, Oregon, USA Posts: 3,893	great!! MORE! MORE!!! *This life is expensive, but at least it comes with a free trip around the sun!*

08 Feb 2003, 20:54	#6
Alien Trapped in Dreams Join Date: 10 May 2001 Location: CHG MO RUS Posts: 17,200	beautiful *MADE IN USSR*

10 Feb 2003, 12:38	#9
Clare Alphanut Join Date: 31 Mar 2001 Location: By a river, near Fort William in view of Ben Nevis Posts: 9,969	wish I could write like that. "I've had many sobering thoughts in my life.... ....it was them what drove me to drink!" [drunk] Grandad, Only Fools and Horses (UK sitcom)

08 Feb 2003, 09:08	#2
wii Dream Master Join Date: 07 Nov 2000 Location: Denmark Posts: 13,701	Very nice...

08 Feb 2003, 13:34	#3
davidhorizon Antilles Join Date: 12 Nov 2000 Location: Copenhagen, Denmark Posts: 1,060	Beautiful! Is there a personal story behind this poem?

09 Feb 2003, 22:18	#7
Kaz Her... Join Date: 22 Jan 2003 Location: Bucharest, Romania Posts: 12,459	Thanks all. I wrote it when I was in one of my dreamy phases - off this planet so to speak! It's about a man sitting with his lover who has just died. It shows the feelings he goes through and his thoughts and how he realises that he must say goodbye once and for all time.

10 Feb 2003, 05:31	#8
Trent Dreamer Join Date: 22 Dec 2000 Location: Raleigh, NC, USA. Posts: 2,357	I got gooseflesh the first time I read this...I could feel the sorrow and loss he felt..and also the realization that life must go on and it's time to say goodbye...Very powerful poem Karen!

10 Feb 2003, 16:51	#10
Trent Dreamer Join Date: 22 Dec 2000 Location: Raleigh, NC, USA. Posts: 2,357	Me too Clare, Me too!!!